Thursday, January 26, 2012

#Nightgale Week 4 Response

Week 4 of 4 – January 26th – PROMPT: Writing is Immortality

Keats – “But on the viewless wings of Poesy, Though the dull brain perplexes and retarts: Already with thee! Tender is the night, And haply the Queen-Moon is on her throne;”(Ode To A Nightingale)

For my WIP (work in progress) – Mighty Men
Rather than continue to reveal details of my script, I’ve decided make my final entry in this challenge an ode by David to his mighty men.

Ode to My Mighty Men
the chief seat of our mighty team
occupied by Hachmonite Jashobeam,
whether eight or three, Adino’s spear
dispatched hundreds of foes despising fear

by his side and mine e'er wielding Eleazar
whose sword slashed like a mighty razor
tirelessly smiting till his hand did cleave
enemies felled beyond belief

last attained unto the chief three
Shammah the Hararite son of Agee
for he also braved the barley field
to prove our God would never yield

are not these written on sacred scrolls
and upon the hearts of men?
immortal deeds fond to behold
                whilst overcoming sin.

beyond these chief another three
cast honor o’er the mighty sea
first Abishai, son of Zeruiah
then captain of the guard Benaiah

these three of the thirty chief
went down to spell my soul’s relief
in jeopardy of their very lives
no leader could their deed despise

howbeit, the reckoning doth fail
inconsistent in its very tale
for despite the glorious act and fame
opprobrium attaches to one name

are not these written on sacred scrolls
and upon the hearts of men?
forever affixed to lives retold
                the consequence of sin.

thirty more in Adullam began to dwell:
third son of Zeruiah, Asahel
also birthed in Bethlehem
even Dodo’s son Elthanan.

Shammah and Elika both Harodite
Helez and Ahijah fighting Pelonite
Ira of Tekoa, Abiezer of Anathoth
giant-slaying Sibbecai son of Hushath

Ahohite Zalmon, called Ilai
Netophathites Heled and Maharai
from Benjamin in Gibeah Ithai
Benaiah the Pirathonite and Hurai

are not these written on sacred scrolls
and upon the hearts of men?
iron sharpening iron can make men bold
                while camped outside is sin.

Abiel and Azmaveth, and Eliahba of Shaalbon
Gizonite son of Hashem another mighty Jonathan
Hararites Shammah and Sacar’s son Ahiam
Ur descendant Eliphal and wisdom’s son Eliam

Carmelite Hezro, Arbite Paarai, Igal of Zobah
Bani the Gadite aka Haggeri’s son Mibhar
even from Ammon Zelek and Naharai the Beerothite
and valiant Ira and Garab of the people Ithrite

of all the mighty men thus fallen
one name will ever be calling
indeed my sin was brought to light
for the blood of Uriah the Hittite.

are not these written on sacred scrolls
and upon the hearts of men?
the genesis of our immortal souls
                demands our death to sin. 


384 words
@Computilizer

Special thanks to Stevie McCoy @theglitterlady for establishing the #NightGale Challenge. During this challenge, my sequences and script outline have come sharply into focus. Interjecting immortality as an underlying theme has provided a hinge for more than one instance of backstory. I apologize for not having noticed the “200 words” in the challenge description. I suspect that I may have been confusing @CaraMichaels coaxing in her #WIP500 challenge. But, I can gratefully say that my Mighty Men script has swollen to over 15,000 words. I am completing my final scenes, and look forward to rewriting the whole dang thang.

Again, thank you Stevie. And, thank you to all who have provided such encouraging comments.

                                                         FADE TO BLACK.


Tuesday, January 24, 2012

Putting Sundance reviews of RED HOOK SUMMER in Perspective

What I’ve done here is to weed through all of the piling on that has taken place in the blogs and reviews, and I present here an index for you to take a look at what has been said about what I expect to be a great film of 2012.

I’ve broken the chatter into four groups of representative articles.

The Good        – these are reviews that support Spike Lee  and James McBride’s effort
The Bad          – these would be mixed reviews (having compliments and criticisms)
The Ugly         – these are the reviewers who were simply disappointed with the film
The Q & A       – because people are talking about the post screening session

I have provided links (below) to the source reviews of the day with excerpts which represent the writer’s essential comments. The only other thing that I have included is the number of twitter followers of these critics. You can scroll down this page to simply get the flavor of the reviews, or you can follow the links.  I have no intention of adding any commentary of my own, other than, “Don’t believe the hype!”

The Good

Los Angeles Times 24 Frames     Jan 23, 2012 2:13pm          | by Steven Zeitchik  3934

Sundance 2012: Spike Lee made 'Red Hook' because Hollywood wouldn't

“It was one of the most difficult scenes I’ve ever done,” Lee acknowledged on Monday. “But I knew it had to be done. It would have been cowardly and gutless and punkish to not deal with it straight on”
Spike Lee's Red Hook Summer is his most interesting/ambitious film in yrs, tho the last section will be polarizing.

MovieNation                                     Jan 23, 2012 07:49 PM       | by Ty Burr  1402

                Sundance 2012 Day 5: Get the 'Hook'

I didn't need to hear Spike Lee's post-screening rant … to appreciate how hard the movie struggles to get the flavors, rhythms, music, and emotions of a neighborhood and a society the movie industry has no interest in depicting with any realism.

I also appreciated the parts of "Red Hook" that work, specifically the evocation of a still-vibrant community in an economic and social squeeze. This is a movie that's best when it's at its most overtly poetic.

New York Post                                  Jan 23, 2012 12:17 AM      | by LOU LUMENICK   830
                Sundance: Spike Lee's 'Red Hook Summer' packs a punch

the film turns out to be Lee's most powerful and controversial narrative feature in years.

The grandfather, brilliantly played by Clarke Peters, is a fire-and-brimstone preacher at a small black church who tries to inspire a fear of God in his non-believer grandson (Jules Brown),

Salon.com                                           Jan 23, 2012 12:10 PM EST | by Andrew O'Hehir    2940

Spike Lee takes Sundance by storm with “Red Hook Summer”


Do Lee and co-writer James McBride (a Red Hook native) really have to include three fire-breathing, social-gospel sermons by Bishop Enoch? No, not for narrative reasons — but they’re so awesome, so tragic, so heart-rending and so inspirational I never wanted them to stop.

This is an unpolished, loosey-goosey, street-level film that surely isn’t for everybody. It’s also a passionate, painful, tragic, haunting love letter to Brooklyn and New York City, to black America and the black church, to the possibility of childhood innocence in rough circumstances. I found it tremendously moving, and the memory of that premiere screening is one I will long treasure, cuss words and all.

Slant Magazine                                 Jan 23, 2012 at 11:47 pm   | by Simon Abrams  480

Sundance Film Festival 2012: Red Hook Summer and Smashed

It takes a little time to get used to the sprawling scope and the blocky dialogue of Red Hook Summer

Lee and McBride have created a new microcosm of uncertainty and shaky hopefulness and it's a shambling, wonderful mess.

Red Hook Summer is set in a rich, thriving world that has both the potential to self-destruct and to be rejuvenated by its community leaders. It's a rousing drama and certainly Lee's most hopeful since 9/11.

SunFiltered                                        Jan 23, 2012                         | by Matt Singer 6755

The Sundance Review Revue: Spike Lee’s RED HOOK SUMMER

the film was as divisive as any that’s played at Sundance ’12 so far

Andrew O’Hehir from Salon called it a “very special movie” and said that while some of his colleagues wanted Lee to trim RED HOOK SUMMER by half an hour, he completely disagreed, writing “They simply don’t like what Lee’s trying to do here, and that’s fair enough. But RED HOOK SUMMER, like Lee’s other personal, Brooklyn films, isn’t about telling a story. It’s about capturing a mood and a moment, a place and its people. It’s about heart and soul, and whatever its flaws, this film has those things in abundance.”

With some Sundance movies, negative or even mixed reviews are a bad sign. Not here. To me, the variety of responses to RED HOOK SUMMER means Lee is back where he belongs: exploring new territory, saying what other directors won’t, and pushing some (mother_*king) buttons.

The Bad (mixed)

Chicago Tribune - Variety            Jan 23, 2012                         | by Peter Debruge  1298

Red Hook Summer

As Flik interacts with his new neighbors, Lee presents personalities so colorful and richly conveyed that by the end of the film, we feel we've known them our entire lives.

The movie meanders, which fans accustomed to Lee's more conventional work may find frustrating, and yet, there's a method to its seemingly loose form.

Cinema Blend.com                         Jan 23, 2012 10:15:30        | by Katey Rich 4384

Spike Lee Brings Brooklyn To Sundance In Shaggy But Powerful Red Hook Summer

Red Hook Summer chases dozens of thematic ideas but only really nails a handful of them.

there were walkouts but also standing ovations, and tweeted reactions that claimed it was everything from a return to form to one of the worst things that ever premiered at Sundance

But nobody tells Brooklyn stories the way Lee does, and for all the fat in the movie that ought to be trimmed, there's enough powerful stuff in there to make the case that Lee's New York is a place worth visited.

Fourth Row Center                         Jan 23, 2012                         | by Jason Bailey  380

#Sundance Review: "Red Hook Summer"

Red Hook Summer is part of a body of work, a growing filmography preoccupied with certain places and ideas.

is not a great film. But it is an interesting one, and it has moments of greatness.

The direction Lee goes in simply won’t play for some audiences—it’s both risky and more than a little derivative … But it worked for this viewer.

EW.com Inside Movies                 Jan 23, 2012 01:49 AM ET | by Anthony Breznican                3263

Sundance 2012: Inside Spike Lee's shocking, ranting 'Red Hook Summer' premiere

Noah Cowan, tweets via @NoahLightBox: “Red Hook Summer: Now THAT’s a complex text.         2 acts of sweet homily + 1 of anticlerical terrorism. And a Bruce Hornsby score!”   2027

@andohehir: “Spike Lee’s RED HOOK SUMMER is a passionate, painful love letter to Brooklyn, NYC, black America & the black church. Very special movie.”  2941

theGuardian uk                                                Jan 23, 2012 16.21 EST       | by Damon Wise  2030

Sundance 2012: Red Hook Summer – review

For start it is so very long – a whopping 130 minutes, ... For another thing, it is loud.

In a single jaw-dropping 10 or 15 minute stretch, Peters' performance spins on a dime, and for a short time the old Spike is with is: tender, sharp, smart – but above all dramatic. This nirvana doesn't last long but it proves that Lee can do it if he tries. For the most part, though, this bloated, flapping, directionless weather balloon of a film is simply trying

Indiewire SUNDANCE REVIEW  Jan 23, 2012                         | by Eric Kohn    4621

Why 'Red Hook Summer' Is Both Spike Lee's Weakest and Most Sincere Work In Years

lack of a filter helps make the noticeably low-budget effort into an earnest, occasionally powerful work, but also one routinely afflicted by sloppiness.

Lee's ode to life in the projects contains a handmade, DIY spirit that keeps the movie honest and heartfelt despite many cracks in its design.

A stunning final montage takes the movie in a profound direction and brings the vitality of the setting into sharp focus, proving that even a weak Spike Lee joint is better than no Spike Lee joint at all.

ScreenDaily                                        Jan 23, 2012                         | by David D'Arcy

Red Hook Summer

Lee’s beloved Brooklyn is a mix of nurturing and violence, yet in this film it also seems a place worth escaping. Lee’s ode to Red Hook is often perplexing

A filmmaker in transition, Lee is asking questions. Like any transitional work, Red Hook Summer also shows its seams.

The Ugly

Brooklyn Heights Blog                   January 23, 201210:32 am                | by Chuck Taylor

Spike Lee’s “Red Hook Summer” Sinks At Sundance


EW.com Inside Movies                 Jan 23, 2012 12:49 PM ET | by Owen Gleiberman 1186

Sundance: In 'Red Hook Summer,' Spike Lee does the wrong thing

Red Hook Summer has some great gospel numbers, but aside from that, it’s a messy, disorganized dud, and not just because it lacks structure. What it’s missing is a moral center we can fasten on to.

EW.com Inside Movies                 Jan 23, 2012 01:49 AM ET                 | by Anthony Breznican                3263

Sundance 2012: Inside Spike Lee's shocking, ranting 'Red Hook Summer' premiere

by ComingSoon.net’s @WkndWarriorCS: “Spike Lee’s Red Hook Summer joins Hounddog, Downloading Nancy and [The Informers] as one of the worst movies to ever premiere at #sundance.”                                                                                                        137

Erik Childress of efilmcritic.com tweets: “I have so many negative things to say about Spike Lee’s RED HOOK SUMMER that I don’t know where to begin.”                               2095

Moments later, stunned by the out-of-nowhere twist, yours truly tweets via @Breznican: “Okay, so Red Hook Summer ISN’T a coming-of-age movie. It’s a what-the-hell?!? movie.”

The Hollywood Reporter             Jan 23, 2012 | by

Red Hook Summer: Sundance Film Review

Spike Lee’s sermonizing new film is too chaotic (and) a strange, unruly beast of a movie,

rambles through almost two hours of unfocused drama, burdened with endless didactic editorializing, before lurching out of nowhere into ugly revelations and violence.

a dig at Tyler Perry.

The Q & A

Sundance Film Festival Q&A      Jan 23, 2012 04:01 PM       | by Eric Hynes   506

Spike Lee Returns to Sundance (and His Old Brooklyn Stomping Ground) with Red Hook Summer

The look and feel you gave to the film was absolutely brilliant. You brought us into the neighborhood, it felt so real


The Hollywood Reporter  Q&A Jan 20, 2012 8:00 AM PST | by Stacey Wilson   93

Sundance 2012: Spike Lee Talks 'Red Hook Summer,' His Feature Debut at the Festival (Q&A)


AceShowbiz                                       Jan 24, 2012 01:56:53 GMT

Spike Lee on 'Red Hook Summer' Rant at Sundance: I Don't Condemn Hollywood


IMDb     Red Hook Summer(2012)


Rolling Stone                                     Jan 20, 2012 2:30 PM ET    | by Dan Hyman 117

Spike Lee Makes Musical Discovery for 'Red Hook Summer'



 
Interesting, eh?

Bob Mahone



This weekend I flew to New Jersey to visit with three of my children and three of my grandchildren, and especially to watch the NFC Championship game with my son. I am a Giants fan, so I am very happy today. And, though I was very excited about the premier of the new Spike Lee Joint – Red Hook Summer, I did not get to follow any of the chatter from the Sundance Film Festival  because I spent Monday at the Atlantic City airport (sans Internet access) waiting to catch a flight back to Florida. So imagine my surprise when I logged in and started checking reviews once I was home.  Now, I am nobody of significance, so I do not want you to think that I am espousing any movie critic expertise.  What I am is a movie-goer who would like a fair review to help me with my spending choices. I am also a computer programmer who knows how to synthesize mounds of data.

Admittedly, these counts do not reflect the audience that has seen these reviews, given the publications where many of the reviews appear. But, I believe that they are significant when compared to the nearly 170,000 twitter followers of Mr. Lee.

Thursday, January 19, 2012

#Nightgale Week 3 Response

The ChallengeWeek 1 - Week 2 - Week 3 - Week 4

Week 3 of 4 – January 19th – PROMPT: To Die and become one with Nature

Keats – “Darkling I listen, for many a time, I have been half in love with easeful Death, Call’d him soft names in many a mused rhyme, To take into the air my quiet breath; Now more than ever seems it rich to die;”(Ode To A Nightingale) 

For my WIP (work in progress) – Mighty Men

David’s adultery with Uriah's wife Bathsheba leads to a coverup and Uriah's murder.

               EXT. CAMP AGAINST RABBAH - SAME NIGHT

               Uriah is lying against a rock In the field. Ahimelech comes
               to him calling out.

                                   AHIMELECH
                         Ok.   Ok.  Ok…                  
                         Uriah!

                                   URIAH
                         What?   What, What?

                                   AHIMELECH
                         Uriah, clouds are appearing. We
                         must be careful tomorrow.

                                   URIAH
                         Ahimelech, surely you did not
                         interrupt my rest for that.

                                   AHIMELECH
                         If Tarhunt has a cause, we must
                         always be cautious.

                                   URIAH
                         Do not be offended my brother, but
                         as the God of David lives we no
                         longer need resort to a thousand
                         other gods.

                                   AHIMELECH
                         I am not so ready to forsake the
                         gods of my fathers.
                             (pauses)
                         While the king, without the ark of
                         his god, is in Jerusalem, I will attend
                         to what I know. If a storm comes
                         tomorrow, then you should be
                         careful.

                                   URIAH
                         Neither the king nor the ark needs
                         to be here for God to be with us.

                                   AHIMELECH
                         With us or not, a storm bodes ill
                         for battle. You could still be
                         hurt. You just don't get it Uriah.

                                   URIAH
                         No need, I already have it. My own
                         sweet Bathsheba prays every day for
                         clear weather for battle. Tomorrow
                         will be no different.

                                   AHIMELECH
                         It's not about what a wife can do
                         for you, but what they do to you.
                        You are a mighty man of battle.
                         Your trust must not be in a woman,
                         or an absent king, but in your
                         fellow men on the battlefield.

                                   URIAH
                         Now I know why you've never
                         married.

                                   AHIMELECH
                         I'm just sayin.

               Uriah waves him off.

                                   URIAH
                         Okay, miserable one. But my only
                         fear is that the so-called help of
                         friends may be overrated.

               Uriah rolls back over to sleep, as he closes his eyes, he
               hears David's words to King Saul.

                                   DAVID (O.S.)
                         From where do you hear men saying,
                         David seeks your hurt?

               INT. DAVID'S BEDROOM - LATER

               Bathsheba stands dressed by the bedroom door, her eyes to the
               floor. David is instructing his attendant regarding her.

                                   DAVID
                         Let no one see you get her home.

               The attendant and Bathsheba leave the bedroom, and David
               shuts the door.

                                                         FADE TO BLACK.

[Omitted Scene] David discovers that Bathsheba is with child.

               INT. CHAMBER HALLWAY - CONTINUOUS

               David passes his attendant, who has been guarding the bed
               chamber.

                                   DAVID
                         Get a message to Joab to send me
                         Uriah with news of the battle.

                                   ATTENDANT
                         Yes Lord.

               INT. DAVID'S GREATROOM - DAYS LATER

               Uriah comes into the room, approaching David.

                                   DAVID
                         Uriah.

                                   URIAH
                         Yes king.

                                   DAVID
                         What report from Joab on the
                         Ammonites.

                                   URIAH
                         The general reports that we make
                         steady progress, and this should be
                         fully resolved shortly.

                                   DAVID
                         This will be great news for the
                         women here. And what of the men?

                                   URIAH
                         Well king, you know there are
                         always those who urge a quicker
                         advance, but Joab and the
                         commanders know what is best.

                                   DAVID
                         Well this is a good report Uriah.
                         Thank you.

                                   URIAH
                         My king.

               David leads Uriah to the door.

                                   DAVID
                         Uriah, you needn't return this
                         night. Go wash at your house and I
                         will send down meat from my table.

                                   URIAH
                         Thank you, Lord.

               Uriah exits.

               INT. DAVID'S BEDROOM - MORNING

               David opens the door and inquires of Attendant standing just
               outside his bedroom.

                                   DAVID
                         What news of Uriah?

                                   ATTENDANT
                         My king, he slept at your door with
                         the servants.

                                   DAVID
                         What?

                                   ATTENDANT
                         He did not go home.

                                   DAVID
                         Fetch him.

               INT. DAVID'S BEDROOM - MOMENTS LATER

               David is clearly still pondering another approach as there is
               a knock on his door.

                                   DAVID
                         Okay, enter.

               Attendant opens the door for Uriah, who enters. Attendant
               backs out, closing the door.

                                   DAVID (CONT'D)
                         Back from the battlefield, and you
                         don't go down to your house?

                                   URIAH
                         The ark and the men of Israel are
                         in tents on the battlefields. I can
                         not eat, drink, and spend time with
                         my wife. That would be wrong.

                                   DAVID
                         What does that say of me?

                                   URIAH
                         My lord, you are the king.

               David has to hide his frustration.

                                   DAVID
                         You are indeed a noble man Uriah.
                         Surely you can eat, drink, and
                         spend time with the king. Return to
                         the battle tomorrow.

                                   URIAH
                         As you wish.

               INT. DAVID'S BEDROOM - NIGHT

               David and Uriah are reclined on pillows, having spent the day
               eating and drinking.

                                   DAVID
                         You are quite capable of holding
                         your drink, Uriah.

                                   URIAH
                         It only appears so because I am not
                         moving about.

                                   DAVID
                         Well, that's partly why I drink in
                         here. I like to avoid the looks of
                         displeasure from my wives.

                                   URIAH
                         I dare not imagine life with wives.
                         Thankfully I have only Bathsheba,
                         who is never displeased with me.

                                   DAVID
                         Are you sure? When she finds out
                         that you were in Jerusalem and did
                         not come to her, she may be sore.

                                   URIAH
                         No king, I am blessed that my wife
                         understands men of battle.

                                   DAVID
                         Can such an understanding truly
                         exist?

                                   URIAH
                         Certainly king. A woman married to
                         a warrior knows that each day on
                         the battlefield may be his last.

                                   DAVID
                         All the more reason that each day
                         at home is so important to her.

                                   URIAH
                         Yes, but what works to get a man
                         home is the support of his fellows.

                                   DAVID
                         And yet, you are now home, by the
                         support of your king.

               Uriah considers the king's point without intending to reply.
               David consistently eyes him. Uriah then changes the subject.

                                   URIAH
                         My king. What does your ...
                             (correcting himself)
                         What does God say of death?

                                   DAVID
                             (in a feigned stupor)
                         In death, we can no longer give
                         thanks, or know God, so we must
                         serve Him wholeheartedly while we
                         live.

                                   URIAH
                         That's it?

                                   DAVID
                         God protects us in this life when
                         we serve Him. God has kept His
                         people since Abraham.

                                   URIAH
                         So there is no life after death?
                         What of familiar spirits?

                                   DAVID
                         God has forbade any association
                         with any who even draw near to
                         them. He is a mighty God, and can
                         do what He will. I survive daily by
                         His hand, so I cannot distract
                         myself with things that are beyond
                         me.

                                   URIAH
                         Then, I should go to my wife.

               Finally, David is pleased and pulls himself to his feet. He
               reaches down to pull Uriah up.

                                   DAVID
                         Yes Uriah. Our much drinking is
                         making our conversation too deep
                         for me.

               David shoes him towards the door.

                                   DAVID (CONT'D)
                         Go home sleep this off with your
                         wife, and I'll ... I'll ...

               David tries to push Uriah out the door. Uriah pauses.

                                   URIAH
                         But king.

                                   DAVID
                         But what?

                                   URIAH
                         A good life is still to do what's
                         right.

                                   DAVID
                         Yes Uriah. Do what's right. Go
                         home!

               David pushes Uriah out the door, and closes it.

               INT. DAVID'S BEDROOM - MORNING

               Attendant is aside David's bed; Uriah slightly behind him.
               Attendant nudges David to wake him.

                                   ATTENDANT
                         King. King.

               David rouses slowly, then very agitated.

                                   DAVID
                         What.  What is it?

               David looks at Attendant then past him at Uriah.

                                   ATTENDANT
                         King, Uriah would like orders
                         before returning to Rabbah.

               David sits up on the edge of his bed and looks around.

                                   DAVID
                         It's barely morning.

               David waves off Attendant.

                                   DAVID (CONT'D)
                         Okay, okay.

               David turns to Uriah.

                                   DAVID (CONT'D)
                         You look ridiculously refreshed for
                         this early hour, Uriah. How could
                         you have slept? Or, are you just
                         now straight from your wife?

                                   URIAH
                         No king, I slept again with your
                         servants. You said ...

                                   DAVID
                         I said what?

               Totally frustrated David rises.

                                   DAVID (CONT'D)
                         I said Go Home!

                                   URIAH
                         You said to do what was right. Home
                         will be there.

               David crossing over to a desk. Resigned to his final resort.

                                   DAVID
                         Yes. I guess you're right. Home
                         will be there.

               David writes out a note, seals it, and hands it to Uriah.

                                   DAVID (CONT'D)
                         Gives this to Joab. We must step up
                         the battle against Rabbah.

                                   URIAH
                         Right away. The men will be glad to
                         get this over with.

                                   DAVID
                         So will I.

                                   URIAH
                         I didn't get to say Thank you for
                         yesterday my king.

               Uriah begins to leave the room.

                                   DAVID
                         Yeah sure.

               Uriah leaves, David falls shaking his head back onto his bed.

               EXT. CAMP AGAINST RABBAH - DAYS LATER

               Uriah arrives back into the camp. He is strutting joyfully
               and runs into Ahimelech on his way to Joab.

                                   URIAH
                         From where do you hear men saying,
                         David seeks your hurt?

                                   AHIMELECH
                         What are you talking about?

                                   URIAH
                         I jest. I am just glad to be back.

                                   AHIMELECH
                         You're nuts. You have been with
                         your wife. I told you that women do
                         strange things to you.

                                   URIAH
                         No, Ahimelech. I have been with the
                         Lord. I should say, He has been
                         with me. Every step from Jerusalem
                         back into camp.

                                   AHIMELECH
                         Now, you've lost me.

               Uriah laughs and keeps walking briskly over to here Joab is
               standing near Abishai.

                                   URIAH
                         Back from the King, and ready to
                         get back into the fray.

               Uriah hands Joab the communique from David. Joab takes it
               will scanning the clouds.

                                   JOAB
                         But a storm is brewing; Aren't the
                         Hittites reluctant to enter into
                         battle on days like this?

                                   URIAH
                         You must have been talking with
                         Ahimelech. Like my king and your
                         people. I serve the true and living
                         God.

               Joab is reading the note

                                   DAVID (V.O.)
                         Set Uriah in the forefront of the
                         hottest battle, and retire from
                         him, that he may be struck down,
                         and die.

                                   JOAB
                         But, allow another to lead the
                         charge.

                                   URIAH
                         My lord, the king, does honor me; I
                         must now honor him, by honoring his
                         God and now my God.

                                   JOAB
                             (dryly)
                         Very well, the strength and power
                         of the true God go with you.

               Eliam comes into the scene.

                                   ELIAM
                         And with me, general. My son has
                         always proven faithful to his
                         family, but on the day that he
                         boasts faith in our God, I must be
                         faithful to stand alongside.

                                   JOAB
                         It is not for me to dissuade you.
                             (turning)
                         Uriah, you will go as 12 men to the
                         hill just north of the gate. There
                         you will lie in wait.

                                   URIAH
                         Yes, Joab.

                                   JOAB
                         I will take a troop before the gate
                         to draw men out from the city. When
                         they come out after us, you take
                         your men and prevent them from
                         closing the gate. Abishai will then
                         bring a force to fully breach the
                         gate.

               EXT. GATES OF RABBAH - LATER

               Men from Rabbah come rushing out unto into the field against
               Joab and his men.

               Uriah and his men come to the gate to try to take it. Fierce
               fighting ensues.

               However, Joab shows shallow resistance such that the men of
               Rabbah appear to prevail. As Joab falls back he calls out to
               Abashai.

                                   JOAB
                         Do not advance, the archers are on
                         the wall.

               Abishai returns.

                                   ABISHAI
                         What of Uriah and his men?

                                   JOAB
                         Fall back!

               Joab's men turn and retreat. So do those with Abishai.

               As the men of Rabbah stop pursuing Joab and shout victory in
               the field, Uriah and his men find themselves cut off, taking
               on arrows from the wall.

               Uriah runs to his father-in-law, just as Eliam is struck by
               an arrow.

                                   URIAH
                         Father, I fear we are done here.

               Blood gushes from Eliam's shoulder.

                                   ELIAM
                         But you have performed valiantly
                         for our God.

               Eliam dies quickly, as another arrow strikes him. Uriah
               stands an turns into an arrow meant for him. He falls to the
               ground, rolls to his side, and speaks his final words
               directly to God.

                                   URIAH
                         God, I thank you for showing me.
                         Please allow David to know while he
                         lives, that eternity beckons the
                         faithful.

               Arrows continue to rain down. Many more striking each of the
               twelve.

                                                         FADE TO BLACK.

                                                        
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